Tuesday, 1 March 2016

Popcorn writing

Popcorn writing 
I heard the popcorn machine bursting and pinging. It banged like a barrel of a gun and it pinged like it was hopping on springs. I smelt smoky waves wafting through the room. For a second I thought there was a real fire. I saw a tornado of popcorn jumping everywhere like a trampoline was underneath the popcorn. The taste of the popcorn made my mouth feel parched like the desert. 

3 comments:

  1. Another really good and descriptive piece of writing. It may have flowed even better by replacing some of the full stops with apostrophes. But I still enjoyed it. I look forward to reading some of the Blogs from your trip and it would be great to see some longer stories.

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  2. "It banged like a barrel of a gun" I really liked this part is a good simile

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  3. The descriptive word really make you sentences awesome

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